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this is the first song I began to write

it is not completely finished but I want to get an idea of how I am doing

its about a girl I am interested in and we have been hanging out and I am tempted to show her the lyrics but I am not sure if it is too early and that the song may not be as neat and sweet as I think.

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Her fingers runnin閳?through her hair

Looking in the mirror

Twisting and turning like a model in despair

I just wish I could see her

Chorus:With looks like this I can barely stand

When she wears that Red Head Band

Just that silky brown red hair

I can閳ユ獩 help but stare

Continues to amaze me to the point I might be crazy.

She walks through the door and the atmosphere becomes hazy

She doesn閳ユ獩 know how much it phases me

If I could just be with her閳? just maybe

Chorus 2 Walking with my hand in her hand

When she wears that red head band

Just that silky brown red hair

I can閳ユ獩 help but stare

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well i tcould use some work but i think the sentiment is really sweet.if this was for me from a guy not specifically the one you wrote but i would just find it amazing that anyone would put that much thought about me.so i would show her...if she likes you she will just like you more.

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Good!

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really good

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there very gd

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nice

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I like it. Itd make any girl melt :)

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pants

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I really like it- especially the title.

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preety cute

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Truth? Blech.

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Not bad

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its nice but you should get up the courage to sing it for her and it has to be perfect timing to so be sure you two are by your sleeves

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i don't really like it... i think it has the potential... but there has to be some minor changes so it won't sound to cheesy u know?

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that actually sounds not so bad..at first the red head band thing was weird, but i think that it makes the song more interesting.

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I like it.

Very good with rhyming...

I guess showing it to her would be ok.... does she wear a red head band?

cause if not, that would be weird

lol

brown-red hair should be hyphenated like i just id though

good job

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Its good but add something to make it sound realistic

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Not bad but the whole sound of the song is that you're desperate for something. As long as you have a clear focus then it doesn't really matter but lyrics are very important when it comes to a good song. Of course, no one likes songs that are too diverse but if it sounds like you're obsessed with someone it gets kinda old.

What you have is great but you should add some subtlety to it you know?

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so beautiful! it would make any girl fall hopelessly in love

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I think its hot and she will probably think is super sweet becase it is

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Man it sounds like that you are truly crushed over this girl in these lyrics are beautifull who ever your going the sing this song to will be heart warmed to know that you like her so much dude your lyrics are off the meter!

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OMG That is SH@T!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!11

Did You Down load it of some European site?????? its Sh@t???????

Iam Not lying.

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I really like it, it's beautiful. The lyrics sound like it would make a very good acoustic.

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sweet

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awwww... she's going to melt in your arms

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i think you did a marvelous song!!!!!!!! i could never write anything like that...... keep it up and that one girl will LOVE it!!!!!!!!!!!